My cousin's band. The band name is Kissy Kamakazi. it is punk band ,and the band web is http://www.myspace.com/kissykamikaze
The web is I first time went to America BAR,and I first time watched my cousin's shows http://garyfann.pixnet.net/album/set/14201793
I must be honest to say,I don't like a Pung music, but feel great afrter listening to it. I don't know all of punk shows is great but I like it.
Such as the weather is good,I must listen agine,but I don't like drink, This is a big problem. You go to BAR no drink or diink water is very strange.
Last time I chat to my friend. I say "I very few go to BAR." she answer to me is "This is not good." So I want say go to BAR is very normal in western.
This composition should be a lot of errors, but I can practice English.
If you find a mistake,please tell me.
Thanks
The band's name is it is a band. my first time I don't like Pung music. feel great after listening I don't know那句我看不懂你的意思>< 下一段可能要點出要聽Pung music 要去 Bar 才有，不然突然連到Bar去讓人連不太上，雖然很符合你的跳耀式思考。 chat+ to 還是 with 人我不確定 加油啦! 有寫英文的勇氣很厲害!!!!!
1.The web is I first time went to America BAR. is 改 that 比較對.我們通常要用代替連接詞. 2.I first time watched my cousin's shows. "first time" 放在句首或是句尾.如果是句尾，要加at first time. 3.I don't like a Pung music. 不用加a 4.agine 應該是again吧 5.I very few go to BAR. 應該要這樣說 I go to bar rarely. 哈哈拉拉雜雜的改一堆 拜託不要啶我XD 多寫就會多進步啦 還有不要用中文文法來寫英文作文，這也是大家常會犯的通病XD
Nice to read your blog, Gary. I believe you must be attracted by the atmosphere of the live show.You are lucky to watch Andy's show. I hope I will get a chance before he stops playing again :p and don't forget thinking in English, instead of translating from Chinese
Hello, please see below my suggestions, please try to think and write in English way. Practice more, your English is gonna be better afterwards. Cheer up la! 1. Web...I think "website" is better. 2. It's my first time to go.../ the first time I went there... 3. I must be honest to say...you can just use " honestly"/ "frankly" instead. 4. I don't like the Pung music, but I feel great or (but my feeling is great) after listening to it. I didn't know all Pung shows would be so great, and I like them a lot. 5. "Such as" means "for example" or "like", I don't really know what you want to say... 6. I don't like to drink/ I don't like drinking. 7. It's weird to go to a bar without drinking. 8. Chat with friends. 9. I seldom go to a bar. I don't go to a bar often. 10. She gave me an answer/ She answered me that../ Her answer is... 11. I want to say/ I wanna say... 12. It's common to go to bars in western countries.
統一回覆 謝謝各位的指教，這很重要。我看了以後都知道哪裡的問題了。 不過我不會修改這篇文章。要原汁原味囉。 以後回來看，在比較有沒有進步。